and so in a closed circle to infinity full of people but without humanity We build boundaries of differences and not bridges I am disillusioned and to change the world I want most to think and act like slaves hell is here on earth and where is heaven? And how love to believe in you -Don't believe but look and see and you yourself are all in the ice calm down like the wind instead of burning Shut up smile and understand that the coin has two sides Yes not all people are good but also stop looking for only the bad think positively give yourself freedom and laughter Everyone's soul is the same and we are all one Custom and live without complaining We are divided only Blind fears False prejudices and body
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Well I liked it more than the first :)
It is very good and I like it very much! The little angel
The poem is wonderful ideologically and emotionally. I am not a writer, critic, philologist and so on. I love poetry and especially the brave writers. There are slight inaccuracies in the poem. I'm sure that by placing accents and commas, they will make this work even more impressive. This will help for better reading. The comma allows a slight pause. The point of a longer pause. Emphasis helps to pronounce words correctly. Attention should be paid to the words "bridges" and "slaves", because in this case, in order to have a rhyme, the accent must be placed on the correct syllable, because if the accent is placed incorrectly, the pronunciation will be incorrect and it is possible to make the second word. This makes it easier for the reader and does not confuse him with reading. These words, which rhyme must be one below the other, to stand out like a song. Poetry is said by some to be like music, like a song, you can't sing everything in one breath, the commas are for a short pause and there are such pauses in music ... Quite a long comment, I hope I was useful ...
I really liked this!