I just sketched some things on quickly a bit the connection is lost I accept criticism advice and hate mostly :) Cold whiskey and green cigarettes on ex and look without pity Past dreams current nightmares In a frozen puddle of mud and I see lips scarlet hair from me caressed eyes and shady with a smile staring at me She steps slowly with fear and I fly straight to her I hug her and she turns to dust and I wake up from sleep The memory of her burns money even Flies in dreams comes in nightmares Kisses me caresses and leaves me again alone Doomed to see her only drunk And the heart has already stopped does not breathe the soul is broken without feeling with a dry throat I write to you and show you what art is
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She's great bro :) I really like her :)
Not bad at all :)
Thanks :) I haven't written for a long time and I think I'll start more seriously now
Better a sparrow in the hand than a dove on the roof, brother ... Find a normal girl and you will pass the cold whiskey and green cigarettes! Otherwise you curl them well! Keep going - the next experience will be even better. And remember from me: there is NO BREAD in dealing with women! (There may be other things, but bread - no, on the contrary!)
Well done author, I was moved :)) I love this style very much .. And what number 4 did he draw for you, as if after you wrote it it should follow that you are not happy in love .. It doesn't have to be a person unhappy in the present to be able to describe in verse, and in any way, any negative emotions. And there is always more to express about them - they are somehow more interesting ... The girl the author is talking about is from the past, or maybe it's a fantasy, why not? :)) But your talent is talent! Well done, keep conveying beautiful forms of emotions and feelings! I'm a girl.
It's a fantasy :)
It's great! The fourth verse is very strong :)
And I like it, it's definitely different from everything here and the idea is not bad, it turned out well, and what does it matter to be a fantasy, my things that I write are also often the fruit of some fantasy, keep writing , I think you have talent (: Angel
It's very nice, congratulations! Keep writing. :) :) :)