Once in your life you love strongly, and then you are empty forever! And today I am just like that - empty ... wounding ... cold! My heart is a piece of ice. My eyes have long since dried up. Gone are the days when I was naive, when I cried and hoped. When I believed in something unreal. When I loved, and in return I received indifference. Today I am different ...! Empty .. hurtful .. cold. forgot what love is.
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It is naive to think that this is a literary work;)
Impressive!
I can't be intrigued by an author who writes, I quote "naive" ...
I have a lot of whims about poetry. I like the meaning, but in your place I would edit. It has potential. Don't get me wrong, but I think it could be better. Original: Once in a lifetime you love strongly, and then you are empty forever! And today I am just like that - empty ... wounding ... cold! My heart is a piece of ice. My eyes have long since dried up. Gone are the days when I was naive, when I cried and hoped. When I believed in something unreal. When I loved, and in return I received indifference. Today I am different ...! Empty .. hurtful .. cold. forgot what love is. How would I write it: Today I am empty, hurting ... cold My heart is a piece of ice, my eyes have dried up a long time ago The time when I was naive, when I cried for love and I hoped. Once in a lifetime you love very much And then nothing remains I once believed in something unreal and remained misunderstood Today I am different ...! I don't remember what love is. Today I am empty, cold and hurt. In lyrics, style is as important as sound and the ability to convey a lot of feelings in a few words. I don't find myself particularly good at all. So don't be influenced by my opinion! Don't take it personally. I comment because you want opinions, and the section is more empty than I want. What do I understand by lyrics? I have read about 10 collections of poems, I am a fan of novels. I prefer the epic because it does not require tact and sound, its techniques are quite simple and do not apply everywhere. You can try short stories. Remember that writers read a lot and get ideas from everywhere. Take this pain, wrap yourself in it and concentrate it on the white sheet. It will get better and better. as well as sound and the ability to convey many feelings in a few words. I don't find myself particularly good at all. So don't be influenced by my opinion! Don't take it personally. I comment because you want opinions, and the section is more empty than I want. What do I understand by lyrics? I have read about 10 collections of poems, I am a fan of novels. I prefer the epic because it does not require tact and sound, its techniques are quite simple and do not apply everywhere. You can try short stories. Remember that writers read a lot and get ideas from everywhere. Take this pain, wrap yourself in it and concentrate it on the white sheet. It will get better and better. as well as sound and the ability to convey many feelings in a few words. I don't find myself particularly good at all. So don't be influenced by my opinion! Don't take it personally. I comment because you want opinions, and the section is more empty than I want. What do I understand by lyrics? I have read about 10 collections of poems, I am a fan of novels. I prefer the epic because it does not require tact and sound, its techniques are quite simple and do not apply everywhere. You can try short stories. Remember that writers read a lot and get ideas from everywhere. Take this pain, wrap yourself in it and concentrate it on the white sheet. It will get better and better. than I want. What do I understand by lyrics? I have read about 10 collections of poems, I am a fan of novels. I prefer the epic because it does not require tact and sound, its techniques are quite simple and do not apply everywhere. You can try short stories. Remember that writers read a lot and get ideas from everywhere. Take this pain, wrap yourself in it and concentrate it on the white sheet. It will get better and better. than I want. What do I understand by lyrics? I have read about 10 collections of poems, I am a fan of novels. I prefer the epic because it does not require tact and sound, its techniques are quite simple and do not apply everywhere. You can try short stories. Remember that writers read a lot and get ideas from everywhere. Take this pain, wrap yourself in it and concentrate it on the white sheet. It will get better and better.
6 for melodrama, bravo. The choice is yours. Wound at will, you will die alone and unhappy. I hope the verse is worth it.
I just want to ask if anyone manages to pronounce NAIVNA at all. How does it occur to someone to write a word that can't even be pronounced that way? I have always asked myself this question and so far I have not found an answer. Why do you decide that this is how the word is spelled?
6 and I have often wondered about the same! My theory is that these people DO NOT KNOW how to pronounce "J"!
7, and why on earth is this elementary thing so widely confused? Let there be exceptions to say that he is so smart, but 80% of them could not learn that she does not speak I. This is learned in the first weeks of first grade.
(7) If only they didn't know that - you should smear them with honey;)) Not that it's a shame not to know something. Before we didn't know, we asked someone and blushed that we were simple. Now there is Google, but there is no one to ask it;)
8, I'm 7 I have no idea, and for me it's shocking ...
To n3. Twa annoys me a lot too. Is it a trend or something .... Author, I'm not sick: n Keep writing and don't let anyone take away this pleasure from you, namely to create.
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