"Just stay quiet, at least for a minute." Thus you will hear the words I hid and the footsteps of my soul, which wanders aimlessly. "Stay quiet even if you want to shout." Just look me in the eye, they will tell you everything. Even if you cry now, you have to grit your teeth. Silently look at my eyes, they will show you. "I promise you'll see everything I've ever dreamed of." It is not lipstick or clothing. Everything I haven't slept in all night. Something they took from my hands. - This time I will not bother you with my empty talk - whole novels. Because you never listen - I know. There will be no words unheard, misunderstood. Just a look in the eye and that's the end. -Did you look? "I saw what was hiding." -And know in my eyes I will keep it forever. This is the ability to be us. Leave me, but I can't hate you. What do you think of my poem? I hope you like it.
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I like it a lot! Well done, you have a gift.
Is unique
Exceptional, so well arranged, with a soul. I hope you have others that you will share with us.
What is written shows talent and depth of experience! Pain makes us creators. But a little more work is needed. The rhyming verse obliges to follow certain rules! If you decide, find them and work to give your poem full brilliance. If you have no interest in continuing to write, leave it, it sounds good as a pronounced human pain, which, however, does not make us hate! Boyana